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by **brown_eyed_newb** on Sun Nov 20, 2011 9:59 pm

When I see myself,
I don’t see a person worth looking at.
No one worth existing.

Please,
Don’t tell me lies
That would say otherwise.
For notable,
I am not.

If I could see something
Worthwhile
In me,
It would’ve appeared by now.
Why would it choose to stay in hiding?

No change
Has come from my birth.
From my being,
All is the same.

Start saying I am
A Human not worthy of life.
That way,
I don’t have to tell myself
The same.

by **Platypus** on Mon Nov 21, 2011 2:54 am

I like your poem!
I'm not good at choosing titles, but I thought of the words "obscured" or "hidden". I was thinking that your (or the person-the-poem-is-about's) sense of worth is obscured from yourself, so you think you should be obscured from others too.

But just because you don't see your own worth doesn't mean that you don't have any, and that others can't see it! :-)

by **brown_eyed_newb** on Mon Nov 21, 2011 3:43 pm

Haha, actually, it's not how I feel now, but how I feel sometimes. And things like 'invisible' and 'hidden' were things I wanted people to feel when they looked at the poem. I like the idea Hidden.

And I know I have worth to myself. But who doesn't feel like they belong in the world sometimes?

by **SamsLand** on Wed Dec 21, 2011 8:53 pm

"Speak to me"

by **OMNICELL** on Fri Dec 23, 2011 1:05 am

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