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Postby Tortured Mind » Mon Jun 13, 2005 9:55 pm

tomorrow i will come out and play
to the morrow i will smile and say
"nothing can bring me down today"

i will run around and wrestle the breeze
i will stay out late untill my toes freeze
play with the mud, build castles from the clay
nothing can bring me down that day

tomorrow i will come out and play
to the rising sun i will smile and say
"nothing can bring me down today"

i would run and kick the stupid ball around
i would fall when jumping and cry without sound
battle with the sticks, climb high in the trees
nothing will bring me down to my knees

tomorrow i will come out and play
to the setting sun i will smile and say
"nothing can bring me down today"

i could eat till my tummey is round and full
i could get in bed and feel warm even dull
drift into dreams, welcomming the new day
nothing has dragged me down this day

tomorrow i will come out and play
to the clear night sky i will smile and say
"nothing could make this day more ok"

but today i will spend in bed trying to sleep
my insomnia prevents me from slipping in too deep
the ache in my heart, the tear in my brain
smiling i say "tomorrow i will remove the bloodstain"

tommorow i will wake up and smile
yesterday i was still in denial
"nothing can bring me down today"
“The goal of all life is death.”
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Postby element » Mon Jun 13, 2005 11:58 pm

Guess what? yes, I like this one too. I like them all!! Have you checked out my newest one? I really like all of your poems!! You seem to put a lot of feeling and emotion into them.
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Postby NietzscheWisdom* » Tue Jun 14, 2005 12:27 am

WOW :x TM' youy're like my twin mind :shock:
a world abandoned by its creator, a universe in chaos, this wasteland, this killingfield, an eternity of. rotten despair..
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Postby quiet-loner » Tue Jun 14, 2005 1:08 pm

I liked this. It felt very evocotive of the carefree nature of early childhood until it hits the penultimate verse where it throws in a darker element.
Excellent! 8)
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