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Postby autumnkitty » Sat Jan 15, 2005 8:39 pm

The world sees a calm face,
They hear a laugh.
But that is not the case,
Things are not what they appear.

Inside she is reeling,
Always upset,
She hates that feeling.
Why can’t she just be happy?
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Postby Irishgirl » Wed Jan 19, 2005 12:30 pm

you wrote:

The world sees a calm face,
They hear a laugh.
But that is not the case,
Things are not what they appear.

I like that stanza very much.

The second stanza needs some work, but I like the first line, "always reeling." and the third line, "she hates this feeling"
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Poem reminds me of someone who I started going out with

Postby ric71 » Tue May 17, 2005 1:03 am

My friend is a great person at work but just as I am begining to know her better she lashes out at me,and begins to tell me how I will eventually want to get rid of her.
Sad, because she is so much fun to be around.
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Postby Harri » Tue May 17, 2005 10:50 am

she's not the girl everyone thinks she is,
she's so much more, has so much more potential.
Why can't people see this in some people? It annoys me so much. I hope - if this poem refers to you, Autumnkitty, that somebody notices and I hope you feel better.
I wish feeling happy were easy, but just in case it isn't, there'll always be someone to talk to here.
x x x
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Right now, as you read this, does it amount to anything more than a collection of thoughts and memories which are just transitory, and come and go in the mind like clouds in the sky? --
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