Poem i wrote

What is depression, well depression to me is lack of expression. is this pain in your soul thats creating some tension. It's lacking the vitality to carry out your dreams. It's the feeling that everything isn't as it seems. a feeling of worthlessness and being all alone. it's the feeling that you're just a lifeless pointless drone. this feeling that you're never the best, its this empty feeling deep inside of your chest, and a feeling that makes you think about your life and second guess. Now what is anxiety, anxiety is this constant feeling of panic. got all these worries and they make you ######6 manic. panic is the fear of doom that is ever near. anxiety is the feeling of being uncomfortable around your peers. anxiety can be a blessing and a curse, it's this feeling that things are always going to get worse. but it can be a blessing though, it shows you the people who truly care and won't let go. combine these two together and you start feeling lost, makes me shudder to think about all the lives these two have cost. It's not all gloom though these things make you who you are, even if they have given you a whole lot of scars. they give you a deeper understanding of pain. it helps you relate to the people we label insane. it doesn't have to be a life sentence though we can make a change, because for every yin there is surely a yang. is there a cure? for that i don't know, but you can help yourself out if you just go with the flow.

any feedback, would be greatly appreciated

would love to hear you reading that out..

I don't think I've ever actually read it out loud to anyone to be honest. Hope you liked it

I did like it (:

You've got a really good and fast paced rhythm going in that - good to read but would be amazing to hear it being read out and to hear all the emotion in that.
If you ever decide to record it and you're comfy.. then please do feel free to send me a link to it (in pm.. not on the open forum due to the anonymity bit of the rules)

Thanks for the feedback, have only been writing at all for about a year. So it's nice to get an analyst from people that aren't family and friends, cause I never know if they actually like it or if they're just feeding my ego haha. I'll definitely link it to you when I do record it

It certainly has a god flow about it jdog. I like this kind of freestyle writing. I don't see myself as having the experience to critique the poetry side of your poem, other than identify with the way it's been written. I like more so the way you keep a balanced view throughout your poem. It delivers hard truth yet remains inspirational. I like that.

i appreciate your assessment, and like that you feel like it captures the experience of these things. while still keeping the optimism that its sometimes hard to see when you're dealing with these things. I also don't really know how technically sound it is as far as academical poetry goes. i just kinda sat down and wrote this in 15-20 minutes one day cause i felt inspired to. I haven't ever taken any classes on structuring of poems. I just enjoy writing and hope that i can write things people can relate to