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Postby Tortured Mind » Wed May 10, 2006 8:35 am

I am the voice of reason
I am a whisper of treason
I wither away every next season
But I will never let you go

I am the finger that touched you
I am the mouth that kissed
I am a miracle of evolution
And I'm waging a personal revolution

I am dying with every breath
I am sparkle behind your death
Blow away the things you said
I am the explosion inside your head

Partonize me, Exorcise me, Sterilize me
But never walk away!!

I am nothing that you want
I am the disturbance in your chant
I am the pester of the land
I am the knife in your hand

Make up your mind
Will you stay by my side
Will you make me suffer
Will you be my buffer
Make up your mind
“The goal of all life is death.”
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Postby Edgewise » Mon May 15, 2006 10:31 pm

Very good. I enjoyed the lines:

I am nothing that you want
I am the disturbance in your chant
I am the pester of the land
I am the knife in your hand

Make up your mind
Will you stay by my side
Will you make me suffer
Will you be my buffer
Make up your mind
I bought me an illusion,
And I put it on the wall,
I let it fill my head with dreams,
And I had to have them all.

- Guns n' Roses
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Postby aimdog » Thu May 25, 2006 1:12 pm

Tortured I have really been enjoying your poetry. You have some real talent. Keep it coming!
"An eye for an eye leaves the world blind." -- Gandhi
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